Observation 3

I corrected several things while revising my paper. The first thing I did was format my paper in MLA format. The reason I did MLA format was because without MLA format, my paper won’t be uniform. With MLA format, I can also easily find what sources were cited. Next, I revised my thesis. I did this because my thesis was too broad, so I made it more detailed and included in it more of what I was going to touch on in the body of the paper. The third thing I did was find outside sources and more historical background to go with the paper. I did this to tie in more material to make a more convincing argument that could. After that, I made a more detailed analysis of my rhetoric terms. I explained what the terms meant and but more examples of the terms being used. Lastly, I reorganized my paper so that it flowed better and didn’t seem as choppy. That way it helped to connect my thought process better.