Observation 3

After the peer editing and self-editing I observed many flaws in my paper. When I went back and edited my paper I worked to make it more detailed and organized. Some of my sentences were kind of confusing and the wording was weird. I also added the MLA format to my citations. I worked to add more examples to hopefully make my paper stronger and more convincing. I added a title to my paper but I am still not really satisfied with my title and think it needs a bit more work. I also think I have a bit more editing to do in order to make my paper stronger. I am going to try to add some more outside information to my paper.