Observation 3

After reviewing my paper I corrected several things. First I organized my thoughts in a better lay out so that they flowed together better. Then I made all of my observations more detailed so that they were explained better and people could really understand what I was trying to say. In my conclusion I then tried to reinstate my thesis in a more effective way so that my points were stronger. Overall, reviewing my paper helped me construct it in a way that way more detailed, stronger and more effective.