Observation 3

As I revised my Visual Rhetoric Paper, many errors in my writing were apparent to me. First, My previous title, Visual Rhetoric Assignment, did not discuss anything original about my work. I changed my title to convey more information about my paper and the commercial I did the assignment about. Secondly, my first draft did not include a works cited page even though I did cite one source, our textbook, in my rhetorical analysis. I added a works cited page at the end of my paper by correctly using MLA format. My most important improvement of the paper was eliminating grammatical errors and finding better ways to state ideas. I did this by reading my paper many times and also having a friend edit it. Lastly, in my previous edit of my paper I found new examples and evidence to convey how my advertisment used rhetorical appeals and strategies.