Observation 3

After revising my visual rhetoric paper, I was able to fix a lot of things that I did incorrectly the first time. Mainly, my paper was not clear and strong enough. My argument was there, but it wasn’t as clearly stated and as strongly supported as it should have been. In my analysis, my thoughts seemed cut off right before I made it to the real meat of the argument, so I expanded on my ideas to make them more sufficient. After I revised this, my paper not only got stronger and clearer, but much more organized. The format was much easier to follow and I think, more persuasive. Besides these things, I added a title and a conclusion that tied my paper together to make it much more convincing.