Observation 3

As I went over my Visual Rhetoric paper, I found a few things that I felt I needed to revise. My paper was not in MLA format, such as the heading and the works cited page so I fixed both of those first. Then, after rereading my essay I realized that it would be a good idea to revise my thesis statement to better fit the whole topic of my paper. Also, I added a few more details and observations that I made from watching my commercial a few more times and comparing it to my paper. I learned quite a bit about reorganization and revision because when I first wrote my paper I didn’t think that there was anything wrong with it. This was obviously wrong though, because I realized that there is always room for improvement.