Observation 3

After doing self review and peer editing on my paper, I found a few things that needed to be changed. When I was revising my paper i had to re-organize my introduction paragraph so that my thesis was at the end of the paragraph instead of at the beginning. I had to add more detail to the content of my paper and to the observations that I made. I also had to correct my MLA format by the citing that I did in my paper and I had to add a header with my name and page number in the top right corner. I also had to add more words to my paper so I tried to do a more detailed analysis of the commercial and video.